Kazura Clan. [Finished.]

Name: Kazura
Founder: Karuno Kazura
Location: Nomadic.

History: The Kazura's Line started with the explosion at a nearby mountain, where power surged. The mountain was forbidden because it was infested with the growth of Narusu Crystals, which the bigger they were, the bigger of a chance they had of mutating certain areas of the body, even chakra if someone was too close of such. It started nearly Five hundred years ago, when someone by the name of "Hanizara Kazura." She was gifted with the power of Condensing her own chakra. She was scared at first, being a shy girl through her life. But figuring out that her chakra was explosive when it had killed her mother in an accidental Explosion. She was said to be cursed with that explosive chakra. She was the few Kunoichi with the ability of Raiton and Fuuton. But her son, when he was born 3 years later, and grown to be 10, realized he had Katon and Fuuton. It was still the same explosion again and again after he figured out how to use his chakra. It scared a lot of the Academy students when they saw this power. Although a lot of the teachers said it would have to be something with the Kekkei Genkai he had obtained. His mother was honored to know her 'curse' was being named a new Kekkei Genkai. She called it "Bakuhaza" because of it's explosive nature, and the 'wave' part just to make it sound a little better. And so, the line of the Kazura began to grow gifted with the experimental power to make things Explode.

Special Info: Can make Explosions!

Requirements: High RP'ing Standards. Permission from Owner.
Current Members: Saruno Kazura.

Name of the Kekkei Genkai: Bakuhaza - Blasting Wave.
Type of Kekkei Genkai: Condensation of Chakra.
Rank: D - S

Description:

The Bakuhaza is a basic Kekkei Genkai that is based upon explosive power. Utilizing two forms of Elemental Release, Katon and Fuuton, or Raiton and Fuuton, a member can condense such power in order to form explosive properties within it. But using this in great amounts, or in too close of range can cause serious injury if not suicide.

In a Less basic form of the Kekkei Genkai Description, the Condensing arrays of the Kazura ability can utilize the condensation of certain elemental release chakra, such as Katon and Fuuton. Utilizing the properties of Condensation of chakra, they can use of such to make stuff, to simply, explode upon contact of objects, people, etc, or At will. The amount of chakra, in a fully detailed explanation, would be the amount holding the amount of power per charge of condensation. Read the chart below. (This is not limited to Fuuton and Katon. Other combination of elements can be read as the same powerful Condensation or Explosion. Such as Raiton and Fuuton.)

Condensed Fuuton Chakra
Condensing Fuuton Chakra is a basic form of the Kazura's ability to condense such substances. Utilizing a set amount of chakra per condensation, can result in powerful fluxes of wind in one area, if not combined with Katon. These "Pushes" of wind can be caused in many ways.

D Rank: C Rank Push.
C Rank: B Rank Push.
B Rank: A Rank Push.
A Rank: A Rank Push.
S Rank: S Rank Push.

Condensed Katon Chakra
Condensing Katon Chakra is a more Advanced way of the Kazura's ability to condense such substances. The ability to manipulate the chakra to Condense Katon chakra can create an explosion beneath the fire that is condensed. With enough force of the Condensation, along with Fuuton, can create an explosion with enough power to....You get the rest.

D Rank Chakra: C Rank Burn.
C Rank Chakra: B Rank Burn.
B Rank Chakra: A Rank Burn.
A Rank Chakra: A Rank Burn.
S Rank Chakra: S Rank Burn.

D Rank Combination: C Rank Explosion.
C Rank Combination: B Rank Explosion.
B Rank Combination: A Rank Explosion.
A Rank Combination: S Rank Explosion.
S Rank Combination: S+ Rank Explosion.

[Optional]Condensed Raiton Chakra
Condensing Raiton chakra is more of a trait for the highly skilled Ninja based on their own elemental releases. Raiton, since it is a hard element to put into a solidified form, takes longer and must take a little bit more time to condense down into an explosive chakra-like state.

Recharging: Although this is a powerful Kekkei Genkai ability to obtain, the drawbacks are as follows. The Ninja, if using an Explosion or Push above B rank, cannot use any Jutsu, due to a lapse in chakra, above C rank. It will require time for the Chakra to settle itself and be able to be usable again. This will take around a Post to Three, depending on the Rank used. And, for an extra drawback, the Ninja cannot use any Jutsu whatsoever for the next two topics if using the S+ Rank, since it makes such a huge explosion.

B Rank: One Post.
A Rank: Two Posts.
S Rank: Three posts.
S+ Rank: Cannot Use Until battle is over. 2 Topic Wait time.

'Other' Combination of elements: Since this is not limited to just Katon and Fuuton, there are other ways to create the explosions from just a mass of condensed chakra. Using Opposite elemental releases such as Raiton and Fuuton can create a way to make a more powerful explosion because of Conflicting elements from their own properties.

Jutsu:

Name of Jutsu: Chakra Condensation
Rank: B - A
Users: Kazura Clan
Type of Jutsu:: Ninjutsu
Element Affinity: Raiton, Fuuton, Katon.
Description: Utilizing the Clan's KKG, a member is able to condense normal chakra, or elemental types to more powerful forms of it's use. This chakra is only made to be an explosive, and is to be used in Jutsu of such. B rank for Normal Elements, A for other Elemental releases.

Approved unless stated otherwise.

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  The wings, a birth trait of the Kazura, were formed by the first generation of Kazura manipulators. Using a special jutsu, based on manipulation of one's own bodily form, they were able to create a gene for the clan to grow wings on their back, these genes were used with the bird's, and their own, to create such angelic wings with the most grace of ease. These wings are made of pure skin and bone, and in some cases, when a Kazura have no wings at birth, a tattoo is placed on each side of the member's back, mainly on the shoulder blades, to create wings of chakra by channeling their chakra through the tattoo, and expelling it out through the back. These wings are mainly Angelic and have some special trait, for special Kazura wielders, and other types of methods, for making them special. Anything other than that, it's nothing considered with the Kekkei Genkai.

  
  Ok remove this then it has no evident needing to be with the clan at all and is pointless and I deny the ability to make them a genetic trait unless integrated into the clan's kekkei genkai somehow (which since it gives a already powerful ability by itself I believe is not needed since it would push opness boundarys) so a A-rank + tattoo(seal) for the wings that only jounin can have should be fine. Also your wings can not have a special trait at all besides being normal wings however this will be covered in the seal application you WILL BE MAKING. And further proof that this is not relevant is in your last sentence which I have kindly bolded.
  
  

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  The Bakuhaza is a basic Kekkei Genkai that is based upon explosive power. Utilizing two forms of Elemental Release, Katon and Fuuton, a member can condense such power in order to form explosive properties within it. But using this in great amounts, or in too close of range can cause serious injury if not suicide.

  
  Lets see if it requires two elements to make it would be a Chunin + just for the two elements but since it requires two elements to be used coinciding with each other it would technically be conisdered an advanced element thus it is Jounin + only. YOU MUST NOTE THAT THE EXPLOSIVE ABILITES ARE JOUNIN +.
  
  
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  In a Less basic form of the Kekkei Genkai Description, the Condensing arrays of the Kazura ability can utilize the condensation of certain elemental release chakra, such as Katon and Fuuton. Utilizing the properties of Condensation of chakra, they can use of such to make stuff, to simply, explode upon contact of objects, people, etc, or At will. The amount of chakra, in a fully detailed explanation, would be the amount holding the amount of power per charge of condensation. Read the chart below.

  
  You do not have the ability to make people explode on touch delete that part. Also what chart all I see is your little explanations which if thats a chart it needs more detail.
  
  

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  Condensing Fuuton Chakra is a basic form of the Kazura's ability to condense such substances. Utilizing a set amount of chakra per condensation, can result in powerful fluxes of wind in one area, if not combined with Katon. These "Pushes" of wind can be caused in many ways.
  
  E Rank: D Rank Push.
  D Rank: C Rank Push.
  C Rank: B Rank Push.
  B Rank: A Rank Push.
  A Rank: A Rank Push.
  S Rank: S Rank Push.

  
  
  How exactly do you condense the chakra and how condensed are we talking about? Also what is a range of your ability to condense such chakra and you need to delete the E-rank level chakra since no elemental jutsu is E-rank also each rank of push must be equal with its own rank so lower all B-rank push amounts by one to there appropriate rank. Cause if you think about it all chakra is already condensed condensing it further adds to the essential force of the blast that is all which does not affect rank but the power behind it and how much weight it can push and by how far which you will need to state REASONABLE amounts of additions if you are condensing chakra.
  
  

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  Condensed Katon Chakra
  Condensing Katon Chakra is a more Advanced way of the Kazura's ability to condense such substances. The ability to manipulate the chakra to Condense Katon chakra can create an explosion beneath the fire that is condensed. With enough force of the Condensation, along with Fuuton, can create an explosion with enough power to....You get the rest.
  
  E Rank Chakra: D Rank Burn.
  D Rank Chakra: C Rank Burn.
  C Rank Chakra: B Rank Burn.
  B Rank Chakra: A Rank Burn.
  A Rank Chakra: A Rank Burn.
  S Rank Chakra: S Rank Burn.

  
  Again delete the E-rank amount and lower each jutsu level down by one to match its own level just state what type of burn and how severe that type of burn is. Also We do not get the rest so you must explain further into how exactly you create the explosion and what each of
  
  

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  E Rank Combination: C Rank Explosion.
  D Rank Combination: C Rank Explosion.
  C Rank Combination: B Rank Explosion.
  B Rank Combination: A Rank Explosion.
  A Rank Combination: S Rank Explosion.
  S Rank Combination: S+ Rank Explosion.
  

  
  
  these mean by rank and again delete the E-rank leveled and lower etc etc...
  
  Also you need to state that to create a explosion of a certain rank you must expel two times the normal amount to create the explosion since you need to use both Fuuton and Katon to create an explosion so you need the same amount of chakra for both elements or your balance is off thus meaning to create a B-rank explosion you need two B-rank jutsus worth of chakra for one explosion.
  
  

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  Name: Chakra Condense
  Type: -
  Rank: -
  Element: -
  Effects: Utilizing the Clan's KKG, a member is able to condense normal chakra, or elemental types to more powerful forms of it's use. This can only be used when in the First State or second. This chakra is only made to be an explosive, and is to be used in Jutsu of such.

  
  No unranked jutsu's you need a type and of course the correct template from below.
  
  

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  [b][u]Name of Jutsu[/u][/b]:
  [b][u]Rank[/b][/u]:
  [b][u]Users[/u][/b]:
  [b][u]Type of Jutsu:[/b][/u]:
  [b][u]Element Affinity[/b][/u]:
  [b][u]Training Link[/b][/u]:
  [b]Description:[/b]

  
  In my view it would be a B-A technique to condense chakra. B for your normal elements (only usable by chunin) and A-rank for the secondary type (only usable by jounin) this is what I want to see from this clan before I can even think about re-approving it.

Oh and one more minor edit......... You need 3 paragraphs of history and here (with the neccessarry edit) you barely come off with one. So you need more ^.^

Since I'm in the mood to replace everything. >>

Shoot me in the head. -_-'

I edited a lot of the shiz, and added a few parts, took out the shitty wings. So there you go. :O

Kaji Kanto wrote:

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  The wings, a birth trait of the Kazura, were formed by the first generation of Kazura manipulators. Using a special jutsu, based on manipulation of one's own bodily form, they were able to create a gene for the clan to grow wings on their back, these genes were used with the bird's, and their own, to create such angelic wings with the most grace of ease. These wings are made of pure skin and bone, and in some cases, when a Kazura have no wings at birth, a tattoo is placed on each side of the member's back, mainly on the shoulder blades, to create wings of chakra by channeling their chakra through the tattoo, and expelling it out through the back. These wings are mainly Angelic and have some special trait, for special Kazura wielders, and other types of methods, for making them special. Anything other than that, it's nothing considered with the Kekkei Genkai.

  
  Ok remove this then it has no evident needing to be with the clan at all and is pointless and I deny the ability to make them a genetic trait unless integrated into the clan's kekkei genkai somehow (which since it gives a already powerful ability by itself I believe is not needed since it would push opness boundarys) so a A-rank + tattoo(seal) for the wings that only jounin can have should be fine. Also your wings can not have a special trait at all besides being normal wings however this will be covered in the seal application you WILL BE MAKING. And further proof that this is not relevant is in your last sentence which I have kindly bolded.
  
  

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  The Bakuhaza is a basic Kekkei Genkai that is based upon explosive power. Utilizing two forms of Elemental Release, Katon and Fuuton, a member can condense such power in order to form explosive properties within it. But using this in great amounts, or in too close of range can cause serious injury if not suicide.

  
  Lets see if it requires two elements to make it would be a Chunin + just for the two elements but since it requires two elements to be used coinciding with each other it would technically be conisdered an advanced element thus it is Jounin + only. YOU MUST NOTE THAT THE EXPLOSIVE ABILITES ARE JOUNIN +.
  
  
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  In a Less basic form of the Kekkei Genkai Description, the Condensing arrays of the Kazura ability can utilize the condensation of certain elemental release chakra, such as Katon and Fuuton. Utilizing the properties of Condensation of chakra, they can use of such to make stuff, to simply, explode upon contact of objects, people, etc, or At will. The amount of chakra, in a fully detailed explanation, would be the amount holding the amount of power per charge of condensation. Read the chart below.

  
  You do not have the ability to make people explode on touch delete that part. Also what chart all I see is your little explanations which if thats a chart it needs more detail.
  
  

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  Condensing Fuuton Chakra is a basic form of the Kazura's ability to condense such substances. Utilizing a set amount of chakra per condensation, can result in powerful fluxes of wind in one area, if not combined with Katon. These "Pushes" of wind can be caused in many ways.
  
  E Rank: D Rank Push.
  D Rank: C Rank Push.
  C Rank: B Rank Push.
  B Rank: A Rank Push.
  A Rank: A Rank Push.
  S Rank: S Rank Push.

  
  
  How exactly do you condense the chakra and how condensed are we talking about? Also what is a range of your ability to condense such chakra and you need to delete the E-rank level chakra since no elemental jutsu is E-rank also each rank of push must be equal with its own rank so lower all B-rank push amounts by one to there appropriate rank. Cause if you think about it all chakra is already condensed condensing it further adds to the essential force of the blast that is all which does not affect rank but the power behind it and how much weight it can push and by how far which you will need to state REASONABLE amounts of additions if you are condensing chakra.
  
  

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  Condensed Katon Chakra
  Condensing Katon Chakra is a more Advanced way of the Kazura's ability to condense such substances. The ability to manipulate the chakra to Condense Katon chakra can create an explosion beneath the fire that is condensed. With enough force of the Condensation, along with Fuuton, can create an explosion with enough power to....You get the rest.
  
  E Rank Chakra: D Rank Burn.
  D Rank Chakra: C Rank Burn.
  C Rank Chakra: B Rank Burn.
  B Rank Chakra: A Rank Burn.
  A Rank Chakra: A Rank Burn.
  S Rank Chakra: S Rank Burn.

  
  Again delete the E-rank amount and lower each jutsu level down by one to match its own level just state what type of burn and how severe that type of burn is. Also We do not get the rest so you must explain further into how exactly you create the explosion and what each of
  
  

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  E Rank Combination: C Rank Explosion.
  D Rank Combination: C Rank Explosion.
  C Rank Combination: B Rank Explosion.
  B Rank Combination: A Rank Explosion.
  A Rank Combination: S Rank Explosion.
  S Rank Combination: S+ Rank Explosion.
  

  
  
  these mean by rank and again delete the E-rank leveled and lower etc etc...
  
  Also you need to state that to create a explosion of a certain rank you must expel two times the normal amount to create the explosion since you need to use both Fuuton and Katon to create an explosion so you need the same amount of chakra for both elements or your balance is off thus meaning to create a B-rank explosion you need two B-rank jutsus worth of chakra for one explosion.
  
  

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  Name: Chakra Condense
  Type: -
  Rank: -
  Element: -
  Effects: Utilizing the Clan's KKG, a member is able to condense normal chakra, or elemental types to more powerful forms of it's use. This can only be used when in the First State or second. This chakra is only made to be an explosive, and is to be used in Jutsu of such.

  
  No unranked jutsu's you need a type and of course the correct template from below.
  
  

  Code:

  [b][u]Name of Jutsu[/u][/b]:
  [b][u]Rank[/b][/u]:
  [b][u]Users[/u][/b]:
  [b][u]Type of Jutsu:[/b][/u]:
  [b][u]Element Affinity[/b][/u]:
  [b][u]Training Link[/b][/u]:
  [b]Description:[/b]

  
  In my view it would be a B-A technique to condense chakra. B for your normal elements (only usable by chunin) and A-rank for the secondary type (only usable by jounin) this is what I want to see from this clan before I can even think about re-approving it.

Oh and one more minor edit......... You need 3 paragraphs of history and here (with the neccessarry edit) you barely come off with one. So you need more ^.^

Still a lot you missed zaney boy. Take another look at what i wrote.

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