Ookami Tsume/Hyouden Yuki. Zetsumei no Hyoushiki. (Mark of Death)

Mark Name: Zetsumei no Hyoushiki. (Mark of Death)
Wearer: Ookami Tsume/Hyouden Yuki
Rank: D-S (Mark is one rank higher than the user and as the user and the usage of the mark progresses, so does the mark)
Appearance:

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The mark going through the left eye.
Location of Seal: Left side of face.
Positive Effects:
Left Eye Improvement -

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Chakra restoration -

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Senses improvement -

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Stregth improvement -

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Improved regeneration -

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Negative Effects:
Activation

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Body damage

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Deactivation

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Transformation Effect: Left Eye transformation.

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When mark is activated all body parts which were claimed by the curse look like this.

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Mark Info:
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When the mark is activated left eye of Tsume/Yuki can see any spirit, including those of any living creature or those sealed in items/other creatures. This vision ignores most of the obstacles and has range of 50m.

Just a note… but “any living creature” implies any and all creatures… so wouldn’t you be seeing a ton of spirits, what with insects, animals, etc and the range of this technique? Anyway, asides from that can you tell spirits apart from one another? If so, how?

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When the mark is activated body parts claimed by the curse acquire more strength. Any body part, claimed by the curse, responsible for one of the senses gets increased sensing ability.

These two lines… are you saying you gain actual physical strength, or that your five senses are strengthened? Anywho, whichever it is you’ll need to tell us how much stronger they get either by using the letter scale or a real life equivalent.

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Body gets fast regeneration ability and all lost chakra is replenished.

How much faster is the regeneration rate? Are you able to regenerate whole limbs/organs/etc? Does this last throughout the battle/duration of the activation of the seal or is it for a specific time limit? And… exactly how is your charka able to be fully replenished?

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Wearer sometimes undergo extreme pain in areas claimed by this curse. After the curse has taken entire body, the wearer dies. Sometimes, at the activation of the curse user loses conciousness.

How much pain, real life equivalent or letter scale please? When will you die from using this / How many times can this seal be used? When would you lose consciousness and for how long?

Yep... As I figured, this whole thing was not very accurate... Sorry, my bad...

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by Resaki on Fri Jul 09, 2010 7:23 pm

When the mark is activated left eye of Tsume/Yuki can see any spirit, including those of any living creature or those sealed in items/other creatures. This vision ignores most of the obstacles and has range of 50m.

Just a note… but “any living creature” implies any and all creatures… so wouldn’t you be seeing a ton of spirits, what with insects, animals, etc

I thought about that myself... It would actually be a pain and another weakness, rather than advantage. So... It actually has sort of a filter. It is restricted to mammals/reptiles/birds/bijuu/spirits sealed in something.... This means no fishes... No insects... No bacteria(?) No super small, large in numbers creatures... And range.. It is mentioned-50 meters.

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Anyway, asides from that can you tell spirits apart from one another? If so, how?

I'm not too familiar with spirits. Haven't seen any. Yet... But yes, my character can tell spirits apart form one another. Let's say that spirit actually looks like the creature himself. (Not likely to be truth but it makes it easier for me).

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When the mark is activated body parts claimed by the curse acquire more strength. Any body part, claimed by the curse, responsible for one of the senses gets increased sensing ability. Sense of feeling and of taste aren't increased.

These two lines… are you saying you gain actual physical strength, or that your five senses are strengthened? Anywho, whichever it is you’ll need to tell us how much stronger they get either by using the letter scale or a real life equivalent.

It means both.. Body parts, especially those like legs/arms that have something to do with movements gain strength. Let's say normal people have strength E. Shinobi, not specialized in being strong have D-C. Those who spend more time strengthening themselves are C-A and those specialized in strength are A-S. My character would be somewhere around C... Anyway. After the curse is activated his strength increases to A. This means he is able to lift very heavy objects, smash walls of buildings. Something like that... Really... I'm not that good at scales and I made this up without thinking... It stinks a little... Anyway...
The thing about senses.... Well if the place responsible for sensing is caught in curse, it gets improved sensing abilities. Improved sight, hearing, smelling. After activation of curse the character would get hearing and sense of smell of about A, before having about C-B. As the vision is improved, it gives him ability to see in the dark and increases his sight range.

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Body gets fast regeneration ability and all lost chakra is replenished.

How much faster is the regeneration rate? Are you able to regenerate whole limbs/organs/etc? Does this last throughout the battle/duration of the activation of the seal or is it for a specific time limit? And… exactly how is your charka able to be fully replenished?

When the regeneration rate is increased, such external injuries as cut and stab, that don't damage vital organs heal in a matter of seconds. Of course if my character is cut in half, he can't regenerate himself. This ability doesn't allow to regenerate lost limbs and the only organs it can regenerate are eyes(that's due to curse location). Regeneration ability lasts only as long as the curse itself lasts. That mark gathers negative emotion of the user and converts them into a sort of chakra. It can only be activated when enough chakra is gathered there and when it is activated, that collected chakra is converted into energy for body parts taken by curse(to increase strength, senses and regeneration) and into users chakra to replenish it.

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Wearer sometimes undergo extreme pain in areas claimed by this curse. After the curse has taken entire body, the wearer dies. Sometimes, at the activation of the curse user loses conciousness.

How much pain, real life equivalent or letter scale please? When will you die from using this / How many times can this seal be used? When would you lose consciousness and for how long?

Okey... I'm not too familiar with pain so I can't really rate it from my own experience. Let's say that from E to S it would be B-A. At E you can easily ignore it and at S you lose conciousness. These pains aren't periodical.
This seal can be used multiple times. It all depends on the duration of usage. About dying... Let's divide humans body into 5 parts. Hands, head, legs, torso. I know, they aren't equal but no matter. It takes 10 posts of continuous usage for curse to take entire torso. And 5 for each hand, leg and head. So this would mean that after 35 posts Tsume would die. (This is when not in one topic. All posts when using curse sum up) But in one topic it takes 15 posts for curse to take control of entire body. Loss of conciousness can only appear when Tsume witnesses death of someone(Excluding enemies-this means allies or neutral people.) and it doesn't happen always. At least 3 out of 5 cases.
These losses may continue from 3 to 6 post.

Well... These explanations are pretty messy but... Well... Maybe you'll be able to understand. *somehow*

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So... It actually has sort of a filter. It is restricted to mammals/reptiles/birds/bijuu/spirits sealed in something....

Mmmk, although I still think you’d be like… blinded when using this I suppose its okay since it is up to you and all? –Second Opinion Wanted-

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Let's say that spirit actually looks like the creature himself.

Mmmk… not really relevant but is its size/volume the same as the creature itself?

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Body parts, especially those like legs/arms that have something to do with movements gain strength. Let's say normal people have strength E. Shinobi, not specialized in being strong have D-C. Those who spend more time strengthening themselves are C-A and those specialized in strength are A-S. My character would be somewhere around C... Anyway. After the curse is activated his strength increases to A. This means he is able to lift very heavy objects, smash walls of buildings.

Soo basically your strength jumps from a Genin Level to… a Jounin Level? Ifyish but… I’m assuming this increased strength lasts throughout the duration of the fight? If so… how long can the seal be kept up at a time?

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Well if the place responsible for sensing is caught in curse, it gets improved sensing abilities. Improved sight, hearing, smelling. After activation of curse the character would get hearing and sense of smell of about A, before having about C-B. As the vision is improved, it gives him ability to see in the dark and increases his sight range.

:/ Ano… so… you can hear/smell like a dog would? Visions seems okay… Soo touch and taste aren’t affected by this at all?

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the only organs it can regenerate are eyes

How long does it take to regenerate your eyes?

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Regeneration ability lasts only as long as the curse itself lasts.

Ahh should’ve asked this a LOT sooner, but I forgot, so how long can this seal last, post wise?

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That mark gathers negative emotion of the user and converts them into a sort of chakra. It can only be activated when enough chakra is gathered there and when it is activated, that collected chakra is converted into energy for body parts taken by curse(to increase strength, senses and regeneration) and into users chakra to replenish it.

Okay so point 1: You need to gather negative emotions to store charka up in the seal; point 2: Before you increase your senses/strength you must have charka stored in the seal, correct? In regards to Point 1, how long does it take for your emotions to turn into charka in an RP? And in regards to Point 2, how much charka is needed for each of the seal’s abilities (in the Letter Scale of E – S please)?

[If I read this right...] ... Since you say it now requires chakra to utilize... I'm gonna ask that you set a limit on how long each of these abilities can be in affect in accordance to the amount of chakra they take up. And, can can these abilities be used at the same time as one another or do they have to be used separately?

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Let's say that from E to S it would be B-A. At E you can easily ignore it and at S you lose conciousness.

Hmm maybe I should rephrase my question: By “extreme pain” do you mean enough pain that could render you motionless, so much pain that you actually can’t do anything except lay there/writhe in agony, or pain that hurts a lot but you can still move?

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These pains aren't periodical.

Okay… so when do you suffer from pain? Every other post? You’ll need to give us something about when you’ll be pain and for how long that pain will last.

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This seal can be used multiple times.

How many times can it be used in an RP? And how long do you have to wait before you can use it again?

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Let's divide humans body into 5 parts. Hands, head, legs, torso. I know, they aren't equal but no matter. It takes 10 posts of continuous usage for curse to take entire torso. And 5 for each hand, leg and head. So this would mean that after 35 posts Tsume would die. (This is when not in one topic. All posts when using curse sum up) But in one topic it takes 15 posts for curse to take control of entire body.

:/ Ano…. So does the curse go through each individual area of the body (in regards to the post count) or is it all at the same time? Anyway, after the post count for each area of the body… you lose function/control over that area, correct? And if the curse gets to all of your body… you’ll die?

Although…. Some problems with this: your heart is located in your torso… as well as some other vitalish organs, and your brain is located in your head… Soo insta death much?

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Let's say that spirit actually looks like the creature himself.

Mmmk… not really relevant but is its size/volume the same as the creature itself?

Well... Spirits size is the same as the creature. (Except for cases when its sealed in something, then it is smaller and will be floating above the creature.) When looking through left eye Tsume will see spirit instead of creature itself.

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Body parts, especially those like legs/arms that have something to do with movements gain strength. Let's say normal people have strength E. Shinobi, not specialized in being strong have D-C. Those who spend more time strengthening themselves are C-A and those specialized in strength are A-S. My character would be somewhere around C... Anyway. After the curse is activated his strength increases to A. This means he is able to lift very heavy objects, smash walls of buildings.


Soo basically your strength jumps from a Genin Level to… a Jounin Level? Ifyish but… I’m assuming this increased strength lasts throughout the duration of the fight? If so… how long can the seal be kept up at a time?

Yep, strenght goes from genin to jounin. But it affects only areas taken by the seal, not whole body. Yes, it lasts through duration of the seal or until seal takes whole body. The seal keeps up for 10 posts if not disabled somehow.

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Well if the place responsible for sensing is caught in curse, it gets improved sensing abilities. Improved sight, hearing, smelling. After activation of curse the character would get hearing and sense of smell of about A, before having about C-B. As the vision is improved, it gives him ability to see in the dark and increases his sight range.

:/ Ano… so… you can hear/smell like a dog would? Visions seems okay… Soo touch and taste aren’t affected by this at all?

Touch and taste aren't affected at all. Hear/smell increases to a dog level (as you say...)

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the only organs it can regenerate are eyes


How long does it take to regenerate your eyes?

It takes 4 posts to regenerate right eye and 2 to regenerate left eye. (That's because of curse location...)

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Regeneration ability lasts only as long as the curse itself lasts.

Ahh should’ve asked this a LOT sooner, but I forgot, so how long can this seal last, post wise?

It lasts for 10 posts unless somehow disabled. (Note: It is Tsume's greatest interest not to use this curse and if its activated to disable it immediately. And he can't activate it willingly.)

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That mark gathers negative emotion of the user and converts them into a sort of chakra. It can only be activated when enough chakra is gathered there and when it is activated, that collected chakra is converted into energy for body parts taken by curse(to increase strength, senses and regeneration) and into users chakra to replenish it.

Okay so point 1: You need to gather negative emotions to store charka up in the seal; point 2: Before you increase your senses/strength you must have charka stored in the seal, correct? In regards to Point 1, how long does it take for your emotions to turn into charka in an RP? And in regards to Point 2, how much charka is needed for each of the seal’s abilities (in the Letter Scale of E – S please)?

[If I read this right...] ... Since you say it now requires chakra to utilize... I'm gonna ask that you set a limit on how long each of these abilities can be in affect in accordance to the amount of chakra they take up. And, can can these abilities be used at the same time as one another or do they have to be used separately?

Point 1: Yes before seal is activated it has to gather strong negative emotions. It takes 4 posts to gather right amount.
Point 2: Yes... The seal gathers emotions and in the moment of activation converts them into chakra. This chakra is separate from that of Tsume's and can't be used for anything else but seals abilities. D- senses, D-B- Regeneration, D- 'special vision mode', B- strength, C- chakra restoration

Chakra replenishing only happens once at the activation of the curse. Special vision mode may continue for up to 10 posts. Regeneration can continue for up to 6 posts(depending on injuries). Senses may continue for up to 10 posts. Strength up to 5 posts. All these abilities are always active and cannot be undone until the end of their time.

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Let's say that from E to S it would be B-A. At E you can easily ignore it and at S you lose conciousness.

Hmm maybe I should rephrase my question: By “extreme pain” do you mean enough pain that could render you motionless, so much pain that you actually can’t do anything except lay there/writhe in agony, or pain that hurts a lot but you can still move?

Okey... Pain that could render 'me' motionless...

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These pains aren't periodical.


Okay… so when do you suffer from pain? Every other post? You’ll need to give us something about when you’ll be pain and for how long that pain will last.

Tsume usually suffers from pain at least 10 posts after the curse is over. If the topic is ended before 10 posts are reached, it is transfered to any other topic until 10 posts mark is reached.

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This seal can be used multiple times.

How many times can it be used in an RP? And how long do you have to wait before you can use it again?

In one post it can be used only once. There is no limit of topics, it can be used until it takes whole body.

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Let's divide humans body into 5 parts. Hands, head, legs, torso. I know, they aren't equal but no matter. It takes 10 posts of continuous usage for curse to take entire torso. And 5 for each hand, leg and head. So this would mean that after 35 posts Tsume would die. (This is when not in one topic. All posts when using curse sum up) But in one topic it takes 15 posts for curse to take control of entire body.

:/ Ano…. So does the curse go through each individual area of the body (in regards to the post count) or is it all at the same time? Anyway, after the post count for each area of the body… you lose function/control over that area, correct? And if the curse gets to all of your body… you’ll die?

Although…. Some problems with this: your heart is located in your torso… as well as some other vitalish organs, and your brain is located in your head… Soo insta death much?

Curse takes one part of the body at the time. When the part of the body is taken by the curse you DO NOT lose control/function over that area. And if the curse gets to all of my body… I’ll die...

When parts of body are taken by the curse Tsume doesn't lose control/functions of those body parts, everything there doesn't stop functioning. Death only occurs when the curse has claimed whole body.

It is even bigger mess than it was at the beginning...

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(Note: It is Tsume's greatest interest not to use this curse and if its activated to disable it immediately. And he can't activate it willingly.)

How exactly do you go about disabling it?

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It takes 4 posts to gather right amount.

Four posts to gather multiple D, C, and B ranked charka amounts? Wouldn’t it take a little longer depending on the amount of charka you’re converting?

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C- chakra restoration

You do realize that this means you don’t get ALL of your charka back… you just get a C Rank amount of charka?

Curse takes one part of the body at the time. When the part of the body is taken by the curse you DO NOT lose control/function over that area. And if the curse gets to all of my body… I’ll die...

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When parts of body are taken by the curse Tsume doesn't lose control/functions of those body parts, everything there doesn't stop functioning. Death only occurs when the curse has claimed whole body.

Soo nothing happens at all when the different various parts of your body are claimed by the seal?

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It is even bigger mess than it was at the beginning...

Nah. Its just getting fleshed out. ^^ Almost there.

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(Note: It is Tsume's greatest interest not to use this curse and if its activated to disable it immediately. And he can't activate it willingly.)

How exactly do you go about disabling it?

Not sure about that myself... This curse isn't mean to be just stopped... I think that person that have great influence on this character can somehow effect him mentally, to snap out of curse state.

The other way is to somehow make him unable to move and let common sense go back to his head (give some time to cool down). And of course there is that option of making him lose his conciousness. And the curse would end if the user would fall into genjutsu...

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It takes 4 posts to gather right amount.

Four posts to gather multiple D, C, and B ranked charka amounts? Wouldn’t it take a little longer depending on the amount of charka you’re converting?

You've got the point there.... 7 Posts.... Would that be reasonable... Or how much should that take...?

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C- chakra restoration

You do realize that this means you don’t get ALL of your charka back… you just get a C Rank amount of charka?

Well... Keeping in mind that my character is D rank genin, I doubt that he could have B or higher rank amount of chakra... So at the moment it would make me get ALL of my chakra back. And talking about future... Let's keep it C so it wouldn't be too much...

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When parts of body are taken by the curse Tsume doesn't lose control/functions of those body parts, everything there doesn't stop functioning. Death only occurs when the curse has claimed whole body.

Soo nothing happens at all when the different various parts of your body are claimed by the seal?

Well... I guess. No... Apart from pain... And positive effects on those parts. I guess all the 'negatives' just sum up to kill 'me'....

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It is even bigger mess than it was at the beginning...

Nah. Its just getting fleshed out. ^^ Almost there.

You've calmed me down.. Thank you... And we shall see about whole 'Almost there' part...

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The other way is to somehow make him unable to move and let common sense go back to his head (give some time to cool down).

Umm how long would this be?

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7 Posts.... Would that be reasonable... Or how much should that take...?

No idea myself. ^^ But… how about 4 for a D Rank amount, 6 for C, 8 for B, 10 for A, and 12 for S? I’m gonna go with you’d need at least A Rank amount of chakra for most of your abilities to work properly… which is why I asked if maybe different abilities are activated at different times… But since its all at the same time and you’re regenerating your own chakra in a sense… A – S Rank amount would need to be convereted? –second opinion wanted-

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Well... Keeping in mind that my character is D rank genin, I doubt that he could have B or higher rank amount of chakra... So at the moment it would make me get ALL of my chakra back. And talking about future... Let's keep it C so it wouldn't be too much...

That’s really not a point… If I remember correctly you’re generally born with a set amount of charka, only it seems like you have more or less charka depending on your charka control since you can't exactly train up your chakra system to produce more chakra.... I.e. the better your charka control gets the more charka it seems like you have since Chakra Control is basically how much charka you use in a jutsu…

Sooo if takes in a C Rank amount it can only put out its equivalent or less… Meaning you get enough chakra back for a couple of D Ranks or one C Rank... You could just say that instead of ‘all your chakra’ it gives you back enough charka for x amount of x rank jutsus at x rank instead… So it’ll work effectively no matter what rank you are.

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The other way is to somehow make him unable to move and let common sense go back to his head (give some time to cool down).

Umm how long would this be?

Well if counting posts it would be 5 posts...

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7 Posts.... Would that be reasonable... Or how much should that take...?

No idea myself. ^^ But… how about 4 for a D Rank amount, 6 for C, 8 for B, 10 for A, and 12 for S? I’m gonna go with you’d need at least A Rank amount of chakra for most of your abilities to work properly… which is why I asked if maybe different abilities are activated at different times… But since its all at the same time and you’re regenerating your own chakra in a sense… A – S Rank amount would need to be convereted? –second opinion wanted-

Well... Okay.. For all of curse abilities to work at the same time it takes S rank worth of chakra... So the curse has to gather negative emotions worth of S rank amount of chakra. So 12 posts.... Did I get that right? (I'm asking because of my poor english.... It sometime gets too complicated... ) If yes.... Than it is pretty reasonable... Though, I'd make that 10 posts... And if no.... Would it be possible to explain it little bit more simple...?

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Well... Keeping in mind that my character is D rank genin, I doubt that he could have B or higher rank amount of chakra... So at the moment it would make me get ALL of my chakra back. And talking about future... Let's keep it C so it wouldn't be too much...

That’s really not a point… If I remember correctly you’re generally born with a set amount of charka, only it seems like you have more or less charka depending on your charka control since you can't exactly train up your chakra system to produce more chakra.... I.e. the better your charka control gets the more charka it seems like you have since Chakra Control is basically how much charka you use in a jutsu…

Sooo if takes in a C Rank amount it can only put out its equivalent or less… Meaning you get enough chakra back for a couple of D Ranks or one C Rank... You could just say that instead of ‘all your chakra’ it gives you back enough charka for x amount of x rank jutsus at x rank instead… So it’ll work effectively no matter what rank you are.

Okey... You're right about that.... So if I want to get all my chakra restored....? I have to get S amount of chakra restored..? Or...?

Ahh you could do something like...

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The seal restores enough chakra for 3 D Rank jutsus at Genin Level, 3 C Rank jutsus at Chuunin, 3 B Ranks at Jounin, and 3 A Ranks at a Kage Level.

Something like, it doesn't have to be exactly like that but you could do something like that. Depends on what you want for your character.



Sooo asides from that you'll need to

• Edit all of this into the original application.
  
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• Get someone else to look over the 'Seeing Spirits' & 'Chakra Conversion'

Okey... Thanks for your time and help... I'll edit it...

Editing finished. (I hope I didn't miss anything)